> That's a terrific story, especially given the fact that it's only 728 words long. I had to write 50 word stories in Creative Writing last year. Now THAT was challenging. Fun, yes, but challenging never the less.

Wow, I thought 750 was hard. I am looking forward to the last assignment, we take of our flash fictions and extend it to a Short-Short story, 750-1050 words. It will be nice to have more room to build up character and setting.

> One sentence in your story confused me, however, because of the wording:
>
> >The library was dark; the lights left on when the librarian left went out when the ice had pulled down the power lines.

I thought that was worded akwardly too, but I wasn't sure how to fix it. Ya see, when the Librarien went home she/he left some lights on (a lot of public buildings do this, I think it is so cops driving past can see an intruder snooping around). Those lights weren't on when Jack woke uo though because ice buildup on the power lines pulled them down.

> Anyway, I liked your story. I thought it was quite good. :)

Thanks.

> ~Den-"half asleep"Kara

Sen'enjoying this class'try