Re: A story (warning: may be a bit depressing)
MissyClar, on host 66.32.12.237
Thursday, May 3, 2001, at 15:33:29
A story (warning: may be a bit depressing) posted by Sakura on Thursday, May 3, 2001, at 03:38:15:
When I first read the "sticks and stones" phrase I went through some english class induced revulsion at the cliche, but then you used it very nicely! That was my favorite part, in fact - how you used that as a way of tying the story together and building to when she used it as a suicide note. If you were to expand it, however, I think it would be nice if the sister had an epiphany when she saw that the protagonist is dead. But then again, that sort of thing is rather cliched. *revulsion*
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